Tuesday, August 28, 2007

LUNES

It seems I'm always a week behind in posting my attempts at trying out the "poetry stretches" that Tricia has been giving us on Mondays this month at The Miss Rumphius Effect. Last week she challenged blog readers to try writing a lune. You can read more about the lune in Tricia's Monday Poetry Stretch-Lune post and at The Lune: The English Language Haiku.

I think the lunes I've posted here need a bit more tweaking. I usually write dozens of drafts of a poem before I feel satisfied that it's as good as I can make it. I used to share different drafts of some of my poems with my students to show them that a writer rarely gets a poem perfect the first time around. I know the fact that I wrote poetry helped to make me a much better writing teacher.


Not Yet Ready for Prime Time Lunes by Elaine Magliaro


PARTLY CLOUDY

Rays of sun poking
Long golden
Fingers through the clouds



SUMMER NIGHT SOUNDS

Mosquito’s whining
Through the night
Drowns out cricket’s song.


END OF SUMMER

August has grown old
September
Waits at the threshold


SEPTEMBER QUARTET

Summer still sizzles
Soon it will
Fizzle into fall

Summer's sharp edges
Smoothed to silk
By autumn’s cool hand

Where will butterflies
Go now that
Summer has left town?

September sings as
School bells ring
Vacation’s over


ELEMENTARY ART CLASS

Bright yellow crescent
Pasted to
A royal blue night

3 comments:

Tricia said...

Elaine,
These are lovely. Since I've not been sleeping lately and find myself listening night noises, I particularly like Summer Night Sounds.
I'll link this page soon!
Regards,
Tricia

laurasalas said...

Elaine, these are great! My favorites are Partly Cloudy and the first two of September Quartet. Very vivid!

I haven't had time to do these poetry challenges. Summer is chaos for me. Love the idea of them, though.

Laura

Elaine Magliaro said...

Tricia and Laura,

Thanks for your kind words.