When I was working on my book Things to Do, I tried to
select verbs that best described the actions of the things that I was writing
poems about. For example, in my RAIN
poem, I wanted my verbs to help readers hear sounds that rain makes and to help
them envision things that rain does: polka
dot, freckle, whoosh, gurgle, patter, tap dance. Using strong verbs helps to
make our writing come alive for the reader.
Things
to do if you are RAIN
Polka dot sidewalks.
Freckle windowpanes.
Whoosh down gutter spouts.
Gurgle into drains.
Patter ’round the porch
In slippers of gray.
Tap dance on the roof.
Then…
Go away.
When I was teaching
elementary school, my students wrote quite a bit of poetry. I often tied their
poetry writing in with science units that we were studying in class. My
students especially enjoyed writing "things to do" list poems about
animals.
Before asking my students
to write their own "things to do" poems, I'd gather them together and
have them collaborate on writing a class poem. I'd talk to them about trying to
select the verbs the best described the actions of the subject of their poem. I
also ask them to try to begin each line or sentence of the poem with a verb.On a large sheet of chart paper, I'd write down the rough draft of our class poem. We'd read through it once or twice. Then I'd give them a day to reread it to themselves...and to think about any changes they'd like to make to their poem. As we worked on revising the class poem on a second sheet of chart paper the following day, we'd try to think of more dynamic verbs that we use in place of those we used in the first draft.
One
year, my students chose to write a collaborative poem about the things they
would do if they were a witch. It was October...and their interest was high on
all things Halloween:
Things
to Do If You Are a Witch
Wake
up at midnight.
Fly
around the moonon your magic broom.
Zoom around a haunted house.
Swoop out of the dark sky
and scare children.
Have a huge purple wart
on the tip of your long, pointy nose
and skin as green as grass.
Wear a tall black hat
pointed as a thumbtack.
Make yucky snake skin potions
in your kettle.
Cast nasty spells on princes
and turn them into toads.
Eat vulture leg stew, bat wings,
and frog eyes for lunch.
Throw bat noses into the air
and catch them in your mouth.
Go to sleep in a graveyard
before the sun comes up.
Excerpts from some of my students' "things to
do" poems:
SHARK
by Mike B.
Speed
through the freezing sea
like
a bullet.Dart away from enemies.
Catch silvery fish
for your chick.
KITTEN
by Leo S.
Tear
up couches.
Pounce
on a furry mouse.Rocket out an open window
and climb a tree...
Sharpen your claws on tree bark.
Dive
for whiskery catfish
and
eat them.Fly out of the water
like a bullet...
Jet through warm seas.
MANATEE
by Adam K.
Nibble
yummy water weeds.
Nuzzle
a friend...Fold up your flippers,
Close your eyes,
And go off to dreamland.
BALD
EAGLE by Nick P.
Soar
through the air like a rocket.
Feel
the wind on your wings.Swoop down to the river.
BUTTERFLY
by Phoebe G.
Flutter
in the sky
And
show off your rainbow scales.Find a yellow rose
And settle on a petal.
...sip
up the sweet drops of nectar.
I found that having my students write "things
to do" poems was not only a good creative writing activity--it was also an
excellent language arts exercise.
Here are other examples of verbs that my students
used when writing about animals:
Rattlesnake: slither, stick out, rattle, bite,
swallow, slip, coil
Shark: glide, bite, gobble, sneak, scare
Penguin: dive, speed, dart, catch, waddleKitten: pounce, tear, climb, fiddle, hide, curl up, rocket, sharpen
Irene Latham has the Poetry Friday Roundup at Live
Your Poem.
I certainly feel like being a manatee today!
ReplyDeleteI love this idea of writing collaboratively - poetry can often be a solitary pursuit, which can be liberating, but can also be intimidating for emergent young poets!
Jane,
ReplyDeleteWhen I became our school's librarian, I continued to help different classes write collaborative poems. I posted them all on my library website. Unfortunately, the system took down my site a few years after I retired. I wish I had been informed beforehand...and not after the fact.
I love the witch poem! And I especially love how you gave students a day to reread and think about how they might improve the poem. "Sleeping on it" is such great advice for creating all types of art. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteI loved your book, Elaine, and know that you must have given such poetic gifts to your students. Each one of these shows they listened to you well. Writing together first really helps, and I love that "vulture leg stew."
ReplyDeleteTerrific post! Have you heard about this call for submissions? It seems like it would be perfect for you to submit a "things to do" poem to:
ReplyDeleteHave you written a bop? A golden shovel or a specular? A pecha kucha or a gram of &s? Invented a form of your own? Send us your best original poems in a form invented or rediscovered in the new millennium for consideration for an anthology that will collect together all of these divergent poetic forms. Email up to 3 poems along with a brief biographical note [and instructions if it's an invented form] to:
thebookof21stcenturyformsATgmailDOTcom
Editors Sharon Dolin and Ravi Shankar will make all final decisions and submissions will be accepted by Sept. 30th, 2017.
So many great verbs! Not only is it a lesson your students took to heart as demonstrated in their poems, it is also one I will carry with me.
ReplyDeleteI've been using a library copy all week with my students as a mentor text if they are writing their narrative nonfiction in verse. Got my OWN copy TODAY!! YAY!!
ReplyDeleteMary Lee,
ReplyDeleteI am so happy to know that you FINALLY got a copy of my book!