tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post6800331494743783415..comments2024-01-29T07:09:43.833-05:00Comments on Wild Rose Reader: Summer Ritual: An Original PoemElaine Magliarohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-43421967622278806832008-05-20T09:28:00.000-04:002008-05-20T09:28:00.000-04:00Laura,I agree that in the past tense the poems wou...Laura,<BR/><BR/>I agree that in the past tense the poems would seem/seemed too nostalgic. With the present tense, they appear to be told by a young girl--and not an old lady reminiscing about her past. I'm so glad Janet gave me the suggestion to change the tense of my verbs.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-71171370430125664452008-05-20T09:00:00.000-04:002008-05-20T09:00:00.000-04:00Elaine, this is beautiful. I completely agree with...Elaine, this is beautiful. I completely agree with present tense. I think multi-generational poems told in past tense (this is a huge generalization, I realize) tend toward sounding too nostalgic. By making it present tense, it is contemporary. It could be happening at the house next door to me, right now. I love that last line. Excellent!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-30834494931014377422008-05-16T17:10:00.000-04:002008-05-16T17:10:00.000-04:00Jules and Jama,I was fortunate to have my grandpar...Jules and Jama,<BR/><BR/>I was fortunate to have my grandparents well into my adulthood--and my daughter was fortunate to have known three of her great grandparents. I'm glad the bond between a grandchild and grandparent comes through in this poem.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Kelly,<BR/><BR/>I agree about "telling" the poems in the present tense. Thanks for your comments.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-38463593043539849322008-05-16T15:01:00.000-04:002008-05-16T15:01:00.000-04:00The recasting of this into the present tense makes...The recasting of this into the present tense makes the memory that much stronger. I know it's from memory, and yet the impact is strengthened by your use of tense and description of the vegetables. Lovely.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-23619496066335904552008-05-16T12:26:00.000-04:002008-05-16T12:26:00.000-04:00What a lovely, heartfelt poem. The bond between yo...What a lovely, heartfelt poem. The bond between you and your grandfather really shines through.jamahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07859083373087448194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-30563957304770112862008-05-16T11:05:00.000-04:002008-05-16T11:05:00.000-04:00I love these poems you write about your grandparen...I love these poems you write about your grandparents and memories. There really is not enough *good* writing out there with such multi-generational characters, the experience between grandchild and grandparent.<BR/><BR/>JulesJules at 7-Imphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14439756778611468303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-44390462576663874932008-05-16T10:08:00.000-04:002008-05-16T10:08:00.000-04:00Liz,Many of my happiest childhood memories are abo...Liz,<BR/><BR/>Many of my happiest childhood memories are about the "simple little" things I did--picking vegetables from my grandfather's garden, eating my grandmother's delicious homemade babka fresh from the oven, chewing on green apples with my cousins.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-23967049017972702762008-05-16T10:01:00.000-04:002008-05-16T10:01:00.000-04:00Oh, that little basket of garden. How delicious. I...Oh, that little basket of garden. How delicious. In a million little ways...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-42249123850035818292008-05-16T09:43:00.000-04:002008-05-16T09:43:00.000-04:00Jone,My grandparents' house was my home away from ...Jone,<BR/><BR/>My grandparents' house was my home away from home. Two of my first cousins lived on the other side of their duplex. The three of us were like best friends growing up.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-92012657619325583242008-05-16T09:19:00.000-04:002008-05-16T09:19:00.000-04:00As I prepared to plant in the garden, I see the re...As I prepared to plant in the garden, I see the red globes and the feathered topped carrots. The beet dish sounds intriguing. How lucky you were to know your grandfather and enjoy his graden.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-87069051699245213522008-05-16T08:57:00.000-04:002008-05-16T08:57:00.000-04:00Tadmack,It's kind of difficult to spell the pronun...Tadmack,<BR/><BR/>It's kind of difficult to spell the pronunciation of dzidzi phonetically. Let me try: djijee. That comes about as close to spelling it the way I pronounce/pronounced it.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-64126429048587090642008-05-16T08:49:00.000-04:002008-05-16T08:49:00.000-04:00I think the present works best as well. That way, ...I think the present works best as well. That way, one can still feel the warmth on the tomatoes and together with the child-sized you, feel the special, beloved grandchild intimacy you got to enjoy. This is really nice.<BR/><BR/>How do you pronounce Dzidzi? Zidzee?tanita✿davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01671822274852087499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-78142178155438695752008-05-16T08:30:00.000-04:002008-05-16T08:30:00.000-04:00John,I had originally written the poems in the pas...John,<BR/><BR/>I had originally written the poems in the past tense. Janet Wong suggested I rewrite them in the present tense. I always listen to her writing advice.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Jenny,<BR/><BR/>Thanks. I loved the poem you wrote about your grandmother.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Sara,<BR/><BR/>I have so many wonderful memories of the times spent at my grandparents' house. <BR/><BR/>I hope you enjoyed your break from blogging so you could spend time with your daughter.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-57588563665413480452008-05-16T06:43:00.000-04:002008-05-16T06:43:00.000-04:00One of the best pictures I have of my daughter is ...One of the best pictures I have of my daughter is her with a fistful of green beans from my mother's garden. <BR/><BR/>How lovely you have these memories.Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-81712591975385550602008-05-16T06:32:00.000-04:002008-05-16T06:32:00.000-04:00That's a gorgeous poem. Thank you for sharing it ...That's a gorgeous poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2373615867496327293.post-27455429813373588332008-05-16T05:32:00.000-04:002008-05-16T05:32:00.000-04:00I really appreciate that you've written this in th...I really appreciate that you've written this in the present tense.John Mutfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08730205221787092204noreply@blogger.com